SHE AND HE :55 FICTION June 14, 2010 She gazed into emptiness. She cried. A teardrop fell on the window sill. ***** He was hitting the nail with the hammer. Something stirred him. The hammer hit his finger instead. A drop of blood fell on the window sill. Share Get link Facebook X Pinterest Email Other Apps Labels 55 FICTION he she SOULMATES Share Get link Facebook X Pinterest Email Other Apps Comments Nikhil Menon said… he died? or is he on 911?? Thousif Raza said… you stir emotions, you know that..... a very good attempt... :)take care and keep writing.......... Rià said… Aah!! Painful....i dont like the sight of blood. Tulika said… Ouch :(Metaphor is stunning. Priya Joyce said… is it like...chot unhe lagi aur dard hume hua? Lucifer said… ohhhh me likes!!!!!!! Priya said… Amazing:)) Timeless Memories - My Bygone ! said… Ah.. it pains... in anyway.. Bikram said… did the tear and blood mingle.. was it the same window.. why was she crying :) oooh so many questions come up.. just proves how good the article is .. makes you thing :) sushobhan roy said… gud one.. very well narrated.. Liked the way u tried to bring the role of destiny and fate..:) I guess if the HE part is written above the SHE part, wouldn't it sound more apt and carry a much more strong message.. What say??? Vintage Obsession said… I like how you put the two pieces together :) nice:)well written indeed Abhishek Behera said… awesome piece!!! disconnected yet connected... weird spooky feeling this evokes Anwesa said… @Thousif,Thank you !@Ria,:) @Tulika,Thanks ! Glad you liked it.@Lil' Priya,Not exactly. Its a kind of telepathy I guess.@Mayz,Thanks !@Priya,:)@ DI,Yeah,it does.... Anwesa said… @Bikramjit, Pleased to see your comment.@Sushobhan,I tried flipping the passages as you said. Yes,it sounded well. Maybe I'll experiment with it sometime soon.@VO, Thanks !!!@Simu, Yeah,I meant it to be 'spooky'. Glad to see that you get what exactly I wanted to convey. Avi said… I think he wanted to cry too, but couldn't. He knowingly hit his finger so that the pain could trigger the tears.
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take care and keep writing..........
Metaphor is stunning.
why was she crying :) oooh so many questions come up.. just proves how good the article is .. makes you thing :)
Thank you !
@Ria,
:)
@Tulika,
Thanks ! Glad you liked it.
@Lil' Priya,
Not exactly. Its a kind of telepathy I guess.
@Mayz,
Thanks !
@Priya,
:)
@ DI,
Yeah,it does....
Pleased to see your comment.
@Sushobhan,
I tried flipping the passages as you said. Yes,it sounded well. Maybe I'll experiment with it sometime soon.
@VO,
Thanks !!!
@Simu,
Yeah,I meant it to be 'spooky'. Glad to see that you get what exactly I wanted to convey.