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UNUTTERED WHISPERS


I know it was you, following me all along. I don’t need eyes to see you. It started raining and I paced up. You were anxious about me.You offered me your umbrella with your face hidden.Only if you had understood me ! I never said those three words, but I thought you knew.


P.S 1:My first attempt at 55 fiction.

P.S : A real big thank you to all blogger friends who made my birthday "A day to remember".

Comments

Arnab Majumdar said…
Great 55 fiction for a first timer... keep writing :) Cheers...
wow a nice take...

u said a lot from those 55...

kudos
very nice 1st attempt. :)
Ria said…
wow!!nice first attempt. :)
sawan said…
first attempt??? impressive!!
Chronicwriter said…
please go away?

three words?

good work with 55 fic

chriz
Pri said…
nicely written! :)
sometimes all we want is someone to understand our silence...

BELATED BIRTHDAY WISHES
ABHISHEK SiM said…
said so much is so less...
Anonymous said…
that was an awesome 55 fiction..

and hey belated happy birthday. :D hugs!

you haven't put my award on your sidebar.. :(

following you from now on.will come back to read more from you.. :)
ANWESA said…
@arnab majumdar,
thanx!!!!!
ANWESA said…
@daydreamer,
thanx !!!
ANWESA said…
@preetilata,
thanx dear!!!!
ANWESA said…
@ria,
thanx dear!!!ur comments have ncouraged me a lot!!!
ANWESA said…
@sawan,
thanx a lot!!!
ANWESA said…
@chronicwriter,
maybe..u can nvr fathom a woman's heart..its true,believe me..
thanx 4 reading!!!!
ANWESA said…
@pri,
thanx 4 reading dear!!n thanx 4 d b'de wishes!!!!
ANWESA said…
@abhishek sim,
thanx!!!!
ANWESA said…
@the pink orchid,
thanx 4 reading!!i'm glad u'll visit me oftener now..
i'll put up ur awards on d blog on a special ocassion..plz b a bit patient wid me..(coming soon...)
AD said…
i still suck at it!
and hence i bow to thee :D
muthu said…
A worth fiction for a first timer.

I enjoyed it. Simple crisp 2 the point and poignant.....

and the picture was apt for the post...

kudos on the good work.

cheers....


muthu
www.average-everyday.blogspot.com
Priya Joyce said…
love is most beautiful wen its unuttered.....i know tat now ;)

kudos gal....:)
As a first timer..a nice attempt..:)

Come back with few more..:)

Cheers
Phoenix said…
et too??

what is it with people and 55 fiction of late?? :)

i love the fact that you take so much care and write in literary writing meters... it isn't easy to limit creativity within prescribed rules..but with the ease with which you write is just brilliant..

really well done
Mayz said…
i dnt believe this is ur 1st attempt...u've alrdy written like a master
Arv said…
wow... this was good :)

nice one mate... cheers...
Keshi said…
Happy belated bday wishes to ya Anwesa!

Im sorry I missed it..u know I hvnt been ard blogs lately. If u read my 2nd last post...

Nevertheless I hope u had tonns of fun :)

*HUGZ*

Keshi.
Harshita said…
ek dum dhinchak attempt hain...

mere toh yeh bas ki baat hi nahi!! :)
ANWESA said…
@AD,
thanx 4 reading dear!!!
ANWESA said…
@muthu,
thanx 4 reading!!i read ur posts n i can say u write 55F too well..
ANWESA said…
@priya joyce,
sumtyms silence can be most eloquent..but here..it wasnt..
thanx 4 reading dear!!
ANWESA said…
@mahesh,
thanx 4 d ncouragement..
ANWESA said…
@phoenix,
55F might be "style of d season" dear!!anyways,thanx a lot 4 ur reply..i hope u'll like such posts in future too...
ANWESA said…
@mayz,
thanx a lot!!!
it seems der is another gr8 admirer of my posts after harshita.
Harshita,u'v got sum klos competition wid mayz.n i'm luvin dis :)
ANWESA said…
@arv,
thanx a lot!!!!
ANWESA said…
@keshi,
thanx dear!!!it was a birthday to remember,esp due to blogger frnds..i kno..i'v read ur post..but err..dint comment der..b happy now coz we'r even now..:)
ANWESA said…
@harshita,
thanx re!!!tere reply ka besabree se intezaar rehta he,kyunki tera harr alfaaz kuch meetha kehta he..
wow..kya shayari hey..wah!wah!!!
now u see-tere bass mein kya kya he..
яノςんム said…
first attempt good enuff!! looking fwd to more form u :)
haritha said…
hmm first attempt gud one...... for it to move forward..
harry
Harshita said…
@Anwesa
;) kya shayari thi...
tumhari sabsey badi pankhaa toh main hi hun...

@ Mayz
Kidnap karvaa dun kya?? haha... competition tuff ho raha hain... ;) ;)
Diya said…
Wow! People presume so many things we don't want them to, maybe the opp would have been better, isn't it? :)
Cheers :)
Vani said…
Wow dats too good for a first attempt.. Luvd it.:)
ANWESA said…
@richa,
thanx 4 reading!!hope i'll write more..
ANWESA said…
@haritha,
thanx 4 reading!!!!
ANWESA said…
@harshita,
thanx ji 4 appreciating my shayari..yes,ur my biggest pankha.
n plz,mayz ko mat uthanaa.saare gal bloggers mere naam ki supaari de dalenge.
lolz
ANWESA said…
@diya,
yes...unyielding human heart..
thanx 4 reading!
ANWESA said…
@vani,
thanx!!!
Cinderella. said…
Brilliant trial at 55 for a first timer.

Guess I'll never build up the cudgels to write one.

Wonderful !
Anonymous said…
That was just great for a 1st timer :)

And sorry for the delay... Wasn't around for quiet sometime...
Anonymous said…
Nice blog
Anonymous said…
VERY nice. :)
ANWESA said…
@cindrella,
thanx dear!!
maybe ur fairy godmother ll help u wid 55 fiction...lol..
ANWESA said…
@kido,
thanx 4 reading dear!!!n its alwez better to b late than never..
ANWESA said…
@ki,
thanx dear!!!!!
Cяystal said…
An awesome 55 fiction for the first shot, and yes, I apologise for not wishing you on your b'day..net problems!..a very very very happy birthday to you! :-) (belated though)..may you get what you deserve..and may you never fail to amaze people by your talent! :)
You are so so talented and so so creative, you are really very good yaar, keep writing and keep making this world a better place anwesa

i felt really better after reading this,


take care and keep writing.......
AD said…
the bomb attempt :)
i mean totally great!

you have it in you!

and on a side note, honey unless you say it, it doesnt hold any imp!
AD said…
see i came back again :D
Rocky said…
Hey,
great work! keep it up
And sorry for belated birthday wishes
happy birthday [:)]
you didn't tell me when it is
ANWESA said…
@crystal,
thanx dear!!!!4 readin as well as d b'de wishes...dun worry..just keep smiling...
ANWESA said…
@Thousif Raza M B,
thanx a lot!!!!i was glad i cud help u feel better...just keep smiling..
ANWESA said…
@AD,
thanx a lot 4 d ncouragement!!!!

do u always have to say it in words? u kno sumtyms silence is most eloquent....
:D too much philosophy i guess
ANWESA said…
@rocky,
thanx 4 reading n d belated b'de wish!!!!!i'm gonna tell u nxt year..till den,keep smiling :)
Amal Bose said…
that was a brilliant first attempt..
keep up the good work :-)
Aw.S.M said…
A nice different take on 55 fiction. Not what we usually get served in ere. gOOD jOB. :)

Luv
Amith
ANWESA said…
@amal bose,
thanx!!!!
ANWESA said…
@amit,
thanx a lot!!!!!

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