I was on my way,
Driving at full speed,
Eager to reach home,
When I saw you
And you took my breath away.
You kept staring
And I just flew past you.
A loud horn blaring .
I couldn’t help but think of you.
As I reached home
I wanted you to be with me.
Emotions held their sway,
Since you had taken my breath away.
Next day I went in a foray,
You had taken my breath away.
When finally you came my way,
It was like “hip-hip-hooray”!!!
DEDICATION: MY DREAM CAR~LAMBHORGHINI
Driving at full speed,
Eager to reach home,
When I saw you
And you took my breath away.
You kept staring
And I just flew past you.
A loud horn blaring .
I couldn’t help but think of you.
As I reached home
I wanted you to be with me.
Emotions held their sway,
Since you had taken my breath away.
Next day I went in a foray,
You had taken my breath away.
When finally you came my way,
It was like “hip-hip-hooray”!!!
DEDICATION: MY DREAM CAR~LAMBHORGHINI
Comments
PS. Am the first to comment! Yippee!
glad dat it made u smile..it was one of the craziest stuff i'v ever posted..but,i guess dats the way i'm-crazy abt lambhorghini..i'm sure many ppl wud luv 2 buy it..
i thought it was romance
i read the words so nice
it took me in a trance
then i saw the ending line
it knocked me out of my dream
it was romance but with a car
you love it, so does it seem
nice sense of rhyme. loved it!! :D
it was a fab reply!!dat too in poetry!!well,thanx 4 reading all my posts so diligently..thanx 4 dat..
Nice brief lines !!
chk dis out:
http://evincere.blogspot.com/2008/07/love-that-got-flushed-out.html
and
http://evincere.blogspot.com/2008/07/hot-cup-of-coffeea-missed.html
similar tastes :"it wasn't your fault". So from the 2nd paragraph itself i had sensed what the ending was likely to be.
good concept. but due to a previous post on similar themes - i felt it to be a bit predictable. the punch of surprise was a bit dampened.
also when you have a crush on someone (and not something) you usually wouldn't feel the way as in the poem (at least i don't find the blaring horn/some1 staring at me as distantly romantic). that also revealed surprise prematurely.
and when am I seeing the short-story?? Eagerly waiting ! best wishes! cheers :D
so suprise endings r becomin predictable..something must b done abt it.thanx 4 reading..
thanx 4 reading!!well,poor other cars..3 cheers 4 lambhorghini!!!
thanx 4 readin doc!!n yes,i remember your post on ur mobile phone,surely gonna chek d uder link..
thanx..
thanx 4 ur critical analysis.it was a wonderful feedback.ya,i too thot so n i think i'll soon b out with a short story(God willing).
lots of luv n luk 2 u..
thanx..
thanx..n i'll b proud d day it comes my way!!
hmm work was cool....
wah car par bhi poems ghor kalyug..:P
lol
Thank you, Anwesa
:)
:)
I assumed it to be a love-poem...but you always surprise me... :)
This is a good piece of work...especially wen itz for a dream car.
thanx 4 reading..
:)
thanx...
wah!kya comment tha!!
kalyug mein car hi to yaar he!!
welcome...
:) :)
thanx dear!!hope 1 de i'll surprise u by not suprising !!!lol
thanx 4 visiting n blogrolling me..
keep visiting..
I had somehow lost your blog,,, but I meant to come back to read you.
Will come here more often.
I Guess i should blogroll you, that way i wont miss ur posts.
and unbeatable is the word for the Lamborghini:P
i just hope we dont lose each other dis tym..ya,blogrollin is a gud idea..
thanx...see my poems r not alwez on family members..lol :)
nice one
btw u shud really chk this link out after this post
http://in.youtube.com/watch?v=RflHJGiN5Pk
thanx :)
chekin d link..
thanx gal..of course,it was luv at 1st sight 4 lambhorghini n me..n yes,i'll visit ur blog..
urs..hemu..
thanx..
Nice verse!
nice one!!!
thanx..
thanx..
well, but its a personal choice.
thanx 4 d comment,i think indian roads will b fit 4 lambhorghini by d tym i buy it..
Watched a Gallardo vrrrom past the other morning. Yellow/black color, early morning, beach... The combination was just perfect...
Good 'un again...
:)
cars....
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